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Lacerta Insula

Post by Offensive Bias on Tue Feb 22, 2011 1:55 am

Prologue – Utah’s Predator

His tired feet pounded into the mud as he ran, his legs burning, and his chest heaving. He made whimpering noises with each breath, and he cast constant, frightened glances over his shoulder. The jungle around him could hide any number of those creatures. Memories flashed back through his head. The inspection of the corpse. The sudden roaring. Terror, confusion. Seeing several of the expedition members fall to the ground, or being dragged off into the brush. He had just ran, and he could still hear the terrible roaring and calling of the animals. And so he thought he was still being pursued, as a wet fern brushed his cheek, causing him to yell in terror. He fell to the ground, flat on his ass, mud splattering along his khaki shorts and bare legs. He tore his hat off his head and let it fall into the mud as he scrambled back onto his feet, almost slipping back to the ground as he did so.

He took two running steps forward, before stopping and darting his head around the jungle. All he could see were trees, shrubs, ferns, bushes. Foliage was everywhere, wet and green. He couldn’t see anything within the jungle, however. He took a moment to catch his breath, his reddened face shiny with sweat and wet from the foliage that slapped at his face as he made his way through the jungle. He licked his lips with a dry tongue, reaching a fumbling hand to his water canteen contained on his belt. He raised his canteen to his lips, his hands shaking the canteen. Water spilled out onto the muddy ground as he took a long, lingering gulp of the refreshing liquid. As he capped the canteen and placed it back onto his belt, he heard it.

It was a strange sound. A cross between hissing and growling. He was instantly alert. He slowly turned his head, staring into the jungle to discern what was making the sound. It was close, whatever it was. He saw it. Between two tall trees, a 6 foot tall, bipedal nightmare. It had approached silently, the perfect hunter. And as he stared, his mouth falling open, his heart beginning to race, it took a slow, almost hesitant step forward, the hissing/growling replaced with silence. The man and the beast stared at each other for what seemed like hours. His mind whirred as he tried to figure out what to do. His eyes widened in fear, and a fresh wave of sweat prickled his forehead. He took a step backward, and almost immediately the animal stepped to within four feet of him and began circling through the foliage. He would occasionally lose sight of it, only for it to reappear somewhere behind him. The silence dragged on. He knew he shouldn’t turn his back on it. Yet, every instinct screamed at him to turn and run, yet he stood his ground, keeping his front facing the terror. Suddenly, without any warning, the creature hopped forward and snapped at his ankle.

He stepped back instinctively, almost falling into the mud again. It stepped closer, growling menacingly. He reached for the first thing on his belt. He grabbed his metal canteen, and tore it off his belt. The creature took two steps towards him, before the canteen slammed into its snout. It roared in surprise and frustration, as it began sneezing hideously, taking steps backwards as its tail swished back and forth, attempting to keep balance during its sneezing fit. He ran. As fast as his legs would carry him, he ran. He heard it, roaring louder than he had ever heard them roar. He could hear its footsteps, the sound of it running after him. He could hear the bushes and ferns whipping as it tore past them. He could hear its steady breathing as it came closer and closer. He heard it growl, and suddenly the footsteps stopped for a single instant, before he felt an incredible weight slam into his backpack. He toppled forwards, his face splattering into the mud. He heard a rip as its teeth ripped apart his backpack. Clattering as items fell out. He crawled from underneath the weight, and finally managed to regain his feet. He began to run again, looking back at the monster as it grappled with his lunchbox, stamping its feet into the material of his backpack. He didn’t look back again, and when he finally stopped, there was no sign of it. He had escaped for now.

He made his way further into the jungle, constantly alert and terrified, weary and exhausted. He thought back to the ambush. They had found what they had been looking for. Undeniable proof of what they wanted to prove to the world. But it had all been a trap. As soon as they had all been clustered around the dead animal, they had struck with terrible force. They had pounced on the men and women, dragged them off by their feet, arms and even heads into the jungle. He had seen several manage to escape, only to be pursued by other creatures. And so he had run, too. And escaped. He was trying to find his way back to the camp site they had erected the day before. It was near the coast, and it had the medical lab they had transported via helicopter. It was a perfect shelter from the horrors of the jungle, and contained a radio he could use to contact help. He froze as he heard a distant roar, echoing through the trees. An animal much bigger than the ones that had attacked him. He shuddered and walked on.

He finally came to a small stream, and he stopped to take a drink. He splashed his face with the cool, refreshing water, taking away some of the effects of the mid-day heat. He knew he must be close to the camp site. The stream was familiar to one they had filled their canteens at before continuing. He stepped through the bush, and came to the clearing of the camp site. His heart fluttered and he laughed to himself. He had reached safety. He made towards the huge, metal trailer. He leaned against it, catching his breath quickly, and he looked at the tents they had all spent the night in. Some had huge rips in the cloth. Others had been collapsed. Damaged cans of food littered the clearing, and a sleeping bag lay in shreds a long way away from the tent it once occupied. There was a large pile of animal droppings by the trailer door. He avoided stepping in it as he reached his hand towards the door handle. He pushed the door open, and looked inside. He saw a woman. One of the members of the expedition. His eyes widened in surprise, and he opened his mouth to say her name out loud. But she was faster. “ROBERT!” She yelled at him. The warning came too late, as he felt a searing pain in his thigh. He began to scream, as he was dragged back into the clearing in the jaws of a much bigger animal. It released his torn and bloodied thigh, and Robert tried to crawl towards the trailer. As he stared through the door at the woman, his eyes pleaded with her as she slammed the door on him. He screamed, and screamed, and screamed as the dinosaur slammed a foot down on his back, and he continued to scream as its jaws clamped around his neck. And then, with a sickening crunch, his screams stopped.
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Re: Lacerta Insula

Post by Gold Spartan on Tue Feb 22, 2011 1:50 pm

YOUR BACK FROM THE GRAVE! Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
Anyways, very well written story. Can't really comment much seeing as how its a prologue, but nice set up. although, you might be better off omitting dinosaur there at the end, and leave it as a mysterious creature and reveal it in a later chapter.
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Re: Lacerta Insula

Post by Offensive Bias on Tue Feb 22, 2011 2:26 pm

Looking back, I think you're right about the ending. But, I figured it was quite obvious by now xD
Also, just to say something in regards to this. I won't be using the typical dinosaurs that everyone gets from Jurassic Park. There won't be very many Velociraptors as they are really too small. T-Rex will have an appearance though. How could you not have one of those?
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Re: Lacerta Insula

Post by Ruski on Tue Feb 22, 2011 4:34 pm

IAN! FREEZE!
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Post by Angatar on Tue Feb 22, 2011 4:55 pm

While reading through this I thought it was a dinosaur-Predator mix. Imagine a velociraptor that was invisible with Predator technology. Scary stuff. Good work.

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Post by R!zZle BiZzl£ on Tue Feb 22, 2011 5:01 pm

EPIC, really enjoyed this Very Happy

im guessing the dino at the beginning was a Utah Raptor?
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Post by PiEdude on Wed Feb 23, 2011 9:34 pm

Clever girl...
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Post by Death no More on Thu Feb 24, 2011 2:04 pm

I like this, can't wait to see a new chapter.
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Post by JumpingJet on Mon Feb 28, 2011 1:16 pm

I'm Loving it OB Smile

I'm nearly done BTW Smile
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Post by JumpingJet on Thu Mar 03, 2011 9:09 am

When you going to read my draft?
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Post by Versago6 on Wed Mar 09, 2011 4:41 pm

cool story

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Post by JumpingJet on Mon Apr 25, 2011 4:48 pm

I've done it OB!

I'll email you tomorrow.
Even though you seem to be ignoring me....
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